If you get on google you can get a blogger account and it just another way to share your story with others. Its probably how I will be posting my story. This is kind of a test to see if it works out.
I am excited to see what you will do with this. Writing takes a lot of time and focus. This seems like a good way to share and get feedback specifically on your stories. - Dad
I like it. nice start. The pacing is very fast which doesn’t leave much time for the reader to “feel” what is going on. That’s not a bad thing if your writing is clear. One thing to consider is adding more sentences that keep the fast pace but clarify what is happening. i.e. The soldier turned and swung his massive fist. She twisted back nimbly, narrowly avoiding his clumsy strike. Help us (well, me anyway) to “see” what is happening.
Keep going. I need to know what is going to happen to her.
I am excited to see what you will do with this. Writing takes a lot of time and focus. This seems like a good way to share and get feedback specifically on your stories. - Dad
ReplyDeleteI like it. nice start. The pacing is very fast which doesn’t leave much time for the reader to “feel” what is going on. That’s not a bad thing if your writing is clear. One thing to consider is adding more sentences that keep the fast pace but clarify what is happening. i.e. The soldier turned and swung his massive fist. She twisted back nimbly, narrowly avoiding his clumsy strike. Help us (well, me anyway) to “see” what is happening.
ReplyDeleteKeep going. I need to know what is going to happen to her.